Tuesday 11 November 2014

Oliver's 5 Sentence Challenge

"Crash, Bang" wet the thunder! Lightning struck the broken windows and nearly killed the white, deadly cat. Nervously I knocked on the door but there was no answer...Suddenly the huge, black door banged open and I tiptoed inside. I saw a bright, yellow light but "Aagh!" I fell into a deep booby trap. Would I ever get out?

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  1. rmannell15 November 2014 at 21:10

    Hello Oliver,

    Your 5SC is very well written. Had I not seen you were in Year 1, I would have thought you were in a much higher grade.
    You have taken care using capitals and have made use of commas and full stops as well as exclamation, question and speech marks.
    Your story is also interesting and left us to wonder if you escaped. Well done.

    Ross Mannell (Team 5SC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

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